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my Lawrence:(in love with a bad bitch called Laura)Ain‘t love great?

me:(in a monsterfucker panic)MHMM…!

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I love the way you tell stories, this one and the others are written so well. I feel like I could constantly go back through each one and never get bored. Which is not common for me. I hope you enjoy creating stuff like this, it's amazing to see and is truly fantastic. 

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Thank you! I'm so happy I can keep you entertained. :D

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That interlude was a nice touch, seeing how you've affected others while your character themself has no clue. Good job :)

-the the boy, pixelboii

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Thank you!! The interlude was not at all planned in my initial drafts but it felt good to add. Glad it was enjoyed. 

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YAY UPDATE

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YAY COMMENT! :) Hope your day is going well!

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Omg lmao I didn't see your comment. My day was great and I hope yours was great too :D 

Spoilers ahead ! 


Oh god seeing the 3 brothers together was so interesting. We would probably be dead by now if we weren't in good terms with Sans or Pap. Oh and Sans the heartbreaker ? Hello ? I need to know more lmao. The story is really starting to become interesting with the clue mechanic, I'm in love with how dark it's starting to get, especially the thing with the yellow roses and Robert's head. Omg I have so much to say about how I feel about this, but I think what confuses me the most is how MC doesn't react to the fact that they have those yellow roses on their balcony (or window idk). 

honestly for a moment I thought they were a schizophrenic and were Doctor Rose-

Or maybe they are ? 👁👁

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AAAAh an update!!!!! Thank you so much I really appreciate your writing and the fact that you also did an Underswap! I love your work and I'll keep playing these! Make sure to take care of yourself as well! :)

AAAH a comment!! :D Thank you for playing & commenting on my game. I hope you enjoy future updates!

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Found a alight oversite in the Sans route. MC/Frisk doesn't react to Papyrus' last name. Either when he introduces himself at the bar or when meeting WD getting groceries. MC/Frisk doesn't register at all that Papyrus shares a last name with Sans and WD.

oooooooops haha. That's been added in now and will reflect in the next update. 

It took me several reads to notice it so no worries. Still love your stuff so much. They have reignited my love of the wide fandom the original game has led to. 

ohhhh i just saw the update, i never got a notification :(

but im gona play it now!!!!

i feel so bad about presing the old man for information i dont want him to be sad. :(

awwww the new chapter is so cute, well meby not the interludes begining. but everything else was cute!!!!! love it like usual.

oh why am i confused as to where the new yellow flower victim was killed even when i went there the day before?

:D Thank you for playing!! I'm glad you found most of it cute. 

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Thank you for spending your time to keep developing the game. I really love it. Couldn't wait to see where the story goes. I love how balance the main conflict along with romantic or frienship routes. It shows dinamic with such dark story. It's great that you really pay attention to detail and let us decide on every little things and like- keep it in database for later. I feel it so much customable and more importantly that choices are really matter in the game that it made the MC so close to us. Also, I really love Sans and his hot blooded vibe. Feels like he set the story on fire while in the dead-dark night. Wingding is my second favorite with his dinanic a bit similar but calmer and colder than Sans. Somehow his romantic sneak peek feels like enermous wave under the calm sea surface. I wonder how his personality is. I haven't read other romantic route since the other looks like great friends rather than lovers. Papyrus is a really nice gentleman while Ralsey is a considerate good man. Maybe I'll read it later though.

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waaa

Thank you so kindly for this lovely comment. I'm so happy you're enjoying the game and you like the options currently available. Sans & WD are certainly fun routes to write, and the dynamic between the monsters & Frisk is one of my favorite things to write in this game. :)

Feel no pressure to go down the other routes, these games are made of love for love of the AU and meant to be enjoyed first. <3  

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New update!! New chapter!! Yippee!!!
I was literally just browsing through itch.io rn looking for interesting games and thinking about when would this one get updated when the notification popped up lmao

Here's the typos I found!

- "Robert Haufer holds out a large bronze key." The typo is at the very last line you have yo click to go forward, your instead of you.

- "Wingding returns home in the early hours of Monday morning." Third line, brother instead of broter.

- "That tension in the air is thick.", "You had to learn to feed yourself and your brother, after all" is missing a period at the end.

As always, thank you so much for your wonderful writing! I haven't tried IF: UNDERSWAP yet, but I will when I come back from school tomorrow. :) Remember to take care of yourself properly!
(Also also what pronouns do you use? I keep forgetting to ask you D:)

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Cherished as always. My tired eyes thank you my dear. 

You --> Your

broter --> brother

period added

Thank you for playing my game and helping spot the typos!! I hope school is treating you kindly. US update coming this weekend if you want to hold off so you can play through Snowdin in one go? :) 

She/Her, but tbh I really don't mind what people address me as. 

I just realized that the description talks about sooner or later, that’s why this so resembles it- I honestly have ptsd cause of the fic bro, when given the options to be a waitress or a singer, I looked at singer and went ballistic (if ykyk)

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well (spoiler to anyone who hasn’t read super far)


The mc (the reader) picks a job to be a singer at Grillby’s bar, little do we know that that job offer is a trap for human trafficking. And so we get trafficked.

wait what? Which route was that if you don't mind me asking?

it's in the fanfiction! there isn't a route for that, hopefully *stares at the creator*

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dont know why but i specifically love this one the most <33

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Nothing wrong with that. <33

dont get me wrong all the other games are just as amazing! its just this one stands out the most. i love your games <3

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me:(an asexual aromantical minding their own business)

Darkpetal16:(releases great games like this and IF-Underfell etc.)

me:(now having a huge crush on Papyrus and questioning myself)What the—— how the fuck did i fall for that skeleton??Damn it… he‘s too cute…

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It is always the mark of a good writer to make their readers question their life choices hahaha

so true  (///>~<///)

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Hey there!.. uh, do you accept fanarts? Even if the fanart is the boys as humans?-👉👈 Your games are so amazing <3

Sorry for bothering!!

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All fanarts are loved and appreciated!! Human or monster versions. :) 

Never ever a bother!

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Yeyy neat! when i finish them i'll moooost probably post them on tumblr or somethin' idk yet

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I’ve at least restarted this game 5 times already- it doesn’t save- at all- please 😭

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This is a browser-based game, so it saves in your cache / cookies. Some web browsers will auto-clear this at different time lines, this is especially common for mobile users. 

There is an option on the desktop to save to disc. This will download a copy of your save file to your desktop that you can then load into the browser whenever. :) 

I’ll try that disk save thing after school- thanks! 🫶🏽

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Papyrus:(Just being genuinely adorable and charming)

Me:(blushing intensely)How the FUCK can someone be this fucking cute and hot at the same time?!Argh!!(can‘t deal with cuteness at all)

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Oh my god I absolutely adore it. I've been replaying this like more than 5 times I think. 3 times for the new updates (gotta love how you added the lore and fleshed out the world, really love the way each and everything breathes of life) and 2 and more times just to see the way each choices affect the dialogue, I love the customization we have aaaaaa

Not only that, but my very first Romance route being Asriel?? HELP I'M FALLING IN LOVE WITH THE WAY YOU WRITE HIM. Especially when you let your partner take initiative, I was kicking, screaming, and blushing everytime Asriel opened his dumb mouth and suffering from how hot my cheeks felt! NOT ONLY THAT BUT I JUST CHOSE CHOCOLATE DRINK BECAUSE THAT'S WHAT I DRINK AND WHEN ASRIEL MADE THAT COMMENT *dies*

*revives* Oh yeah and also, the way you're able to write the more grim and dark aspects of Frisk's life?? Holy shit it was amazing, the sounds were paired well and there was a genuine sense of tension and worry. I cannot begin to explain how I absolutely adore (and shit my pants) when I see a sequence commence. Thank god for Frisk's ability to reset unconsciously.

Looking forward to the next Chapter!! Visibly shaking and crying I adore Asriel but also that dream tho?? Hehehehe-- 

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Yay! I'm so glad you like it, thank you so dang much for replaying it.

Eyes Happy Sticker - Eyes Happy Excited Stickers

I was so worried that the lore would be too much of a chore to read, I'm relieved you didn't find that the case. 

Asriel is such a good monster to love! He's so sweet. 

YES! Being able to initiate or be initiated on is such an important preference, I really wanted to include it here since a big portion of this game is about the relationships. Special dialogue options unlock for each Love Interest depending on some of your preferences - or even apartment decor. I'm delighted someone found the chocolate milk one.  

I'm looking forward to your reaction to the next chapter. :p

I finished the draft yesterday, I'll start editing it in a few days. :)

Thank you very kindly for your comment!

Omg I'm so excited!! Goodluck with the development! Looking forward to the chaos and mess! (Also when Asriel nearly said we were his Soulmate?? Please, I was so damn flustered)

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I‘ve just realized that my Lawrence looks a LOT like an OC that i made half a year ago 😅 for example:

Lawrence=tall,kind,affectionate,short and neatly combed cinnamon hair,blue+brown eyes,smart,brave,ivory skin 

Charles=tall,kind,affectionate,short and neatly combed cinnamon hair,blind on the left eye w/ scar,green eye,smart,brave,ivory skin 

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How did you make these!? Like what with? Cause I really want to make so many things but I don't know how or what website iS good :'(

I've seen all three and all of them are so GOOD btw!

Darkpetal16 uses Twine for these games

Twine - Sugarcube2. Install here: https://twinery.org/

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I'm here to romance the goat

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nice 

Who else gets the feeling that Lawrence will be kinda overprotective of us if we choose to romance the skelletons?

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sincerely he has a point why he is overprotective of us lol XD

Hell yeah he does LOL I’m preeetty sure that we will become a mafioso when choosing the boys XD

We‘re gonna get in sooooo much trouble hahahaha 🤣🤣 

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frr

yes but I love skeletons and he can do nothing about it

Fuck yeah ✊😆

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This is the perfect combo of spice,cuteness,fear and passion.Good job 😌

thank you!

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I’m checking through the text again and I was wondering if you could share the whole thing with me so I could make grammatical changes or suggestions more easily.

There are a few nit-picky changes like adding commas and hyphens. Also a few times when you used the wrong tense.

Porcelain was spelled porcelian in the customization page and continues throughout the story.

On the “A cool breeze” page Subtle was spelled sublte.

On the Your favorite color is____ page if you pick a short hair style there’s a typo saying “easy it is take care of.” instead of “it is easy to take care of.”

If you pick to be a singer it says : You have a voice of angel and there needs to be a ‘an’.

On the Ebbot City hasn’t changed page, street lights needs to be streetlights, you need a the in front of the word mafia, and orphanges needs to be spelled orphanages.

(There’s a few more so far but I haven’t had time to make sure I write them all down so I’ll need a bit more time. I hope this helps!;^;)

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On “The door bell chimes” door bell needs to be doorbell, discont needs to be discount, tuany should be tawny, a was should be in front of broken.

I've been trying to do an export of the file from twine but it keeps crashing. I'm still looking into it, as I really do appreciate the offer. 

Porcelain has been corrected. 

Sublte --> subtle

easy it is -- > it is easy to

an added

street lights --> streetlights

orphanges --> orphanages

door bell --> doorbell

discont --> discount



Thank you so so much for pointing this out! I'll keep looking on a way to export without the lines of code getting in the way of the draft. I really aprpeciate your help!

Thank you so much!!! Until then I’ll just do my best to keep track of where everything is. I try to write down which path I’m on, along with which choices I choose that’ll change the wording of said path. I absolutely adore your work and would love to take any load of your shoulders I can. Twine is a bitch to use for me so I gave up on it, but I’m proud of you for continuing to make awesome things with it!

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your work is as lovely as a sunset 🌅

thank you very kindly :)

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i like the story a good game 10 / 10 

thank you so much!

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I really enjoyed the underfell game as well as mafiafell one, I really like the way you manage to "illustrate" the characters in a manner that  they change how they think or feel  and their characteristics are not exaggerated. KEEP IT UP BUDDIE UR WRITTING SKILLS ARE AWESOME

 

Thank you so much! I appreciate you playing and commenting, it really means a lot to me. These characters are very dear. 


THANK YA! WILL DO! :D

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I finished your underfell game, very well written, wonderful world building, excellent portrayal of the characters. I don't usually play text based games and I expected nothing but edge and angst out of something related to underfell but you surprised me and did a great job on it. I've just finished chapter 4 of this game and can safely say I love this one so far, I am waiting patiently for chapter 5. Good job and good luck.

-the the boy, pixelboii

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Thank you! 

Yes, UF is normally a pretty edgy-verse, so all the more reason for Frisk to not be edgy. :) 

I'm grateful you're giving this game a shot, and I hope you enjoy chapter 5 when it comes out. 

Hi,i found quite the amount of errors in one of the dreams.I went through the fem. Route first,so i‘ll post more if i find some on the other gender routes.

Hi! Thank you so much for pointing this out - I accidentally deleted a " when editing and didn't notice haha. It's fixed now.

Anytime😌.I‘m just glad to help you out :)

sorry to ask for an eye option again… but would you be ok with adding this?

(I‘m sorry if the pic looks creepy,the others were a lot more scary than it😓)

Hi! I'm not opposed to more eye color options, however more customization may need to wait until after the main game is finished. :)

cool 😊

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A-also if it isn‘t too much to ask,could the player have a different instrumental wish like a harp?I have some severe trauma that involves piano…

I really don‘t wanna be a bother with all of my requests 🙁

Requests aren't bother, but I'm afraid any more extra customizations will have to wait until after the main game is finished. 

Hope you have a nice day. :)

Am having a nice one and i understand.Thank you :)

I am currently working on making a comic about this game but i‘m a bit confused w/ how tall Daisy is… is she 5‘8 ft or a bit taller because my Frisk is that height 😅

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when your done can you post a link or somthing?

Sure,i promise to post it since you asked so nicely:)

if Tumblr finally lets me make an account i’ll post it there 😊

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also i didn‘t decide yet wich romance-route i am going to draw first so i‘m lettin‘ ya decide ;)

(It‘ll be black and white so that everyone can adjust it to their liking)

Choose wisely 😌

ummmm, sans or gaster. but i think sans might be an easier one too start with. but i think you should start with the character you want too start with! have fun.

It has been chosen.

Consider yourself lucky for usually  i do not let others choose  what i draw.I‘ll start right away 😊

Lookin' forward to the results!! :D

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well thank you then! have a fun time making the comic, im sure it will be lovely.

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Daisy is 5'11" without heels, but you can hc her height to be something easier for you to work with. 

Thank you!Don‘t worry,i am up to the challenge! >:3

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I realy like your games, i hope youll continue making undertale based ones. of course i only want you to do it if its fun and somting you like doing, but i become realy happy when i see that youve updated the game, it makes my day better. i hope your haveing a good day. sorry for the bad speling im not an english speaker and i dont know how to make the upwords dot. i truly love your works, and sorry if its weird but i love you in an admiering way, becouse i love interactive fiction and i look everyday to see if the games i like have updated.

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Thank you!! And yes, I plan to keep making games for so long as I have the willpower haha. I'm very fond of the UT fandom and want to contribute as much as I can. 

Your english is perfectly fine, I understand you well. 

Thank you thank you for your kind words. :) I hope you will enjoy my future games / updates!

I know ill enjoy your future work! as long as you have passion for it im sure ill continue to play your games!

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I kind of have the bad feeling that our search of Lawrence will end with us finding out that he has already died and looking for him was useless from the start…

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That would be a downright tragedy. D: 

Indeed.I sure hope he‘s ok cuz if there is even just a hair misplaced on my brother the whole city is gonna feel.My.Wrath! >:(

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Uwuuuu, this is so gooood 🤤♥️

uwa thank you thank you~

Who else thinks that the music during our memory dreams of Lawrence sounds at one point a bit like „this is what falling in love feels like“ from JVKE ?

How do I continue into the next chapter with all my saved information

Save on the page which says "End Chapter #" and you should be able to pick up where you left off once the next update drops.

Please save a couple passages back. I delete the End chapter passages when I upload the new chapter. 

Please save a couple passages back. I delete the End chapter passages when I upload the new chapter. 

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here‘s a cookie for your good work :)

It‘s choclatechip cookies 😊

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Looks delicious, thank you!!

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You are welcome and your content is loved ❤️😌

I am glad that you give yourself more time for the updates and some breaks like i asked from you in the first coment of this game.I‘m proud of what you‘ve acomplished so far!Look at you go 😊

I knew you could do it ✊😁

Can the male version also get to sing on stage?Becuz some guys also have nice singing voices and i think it would be nice to let‘em have the chance 😅

(I‘m playing this game daily btw and i think i‘ve got addicted to it by now.I can‘t stop myself from reading anymore and almost got my phone taken away because i read this during lunch break if it weren‘t for my acting skills from drama club LOL 😅🥲)

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Maybe it can be added after the main game is complete,

Haha I'm glad you like my story so much, thank you for playing it!

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I meant like as a job at the black swan from the start haha 😅

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