Hihi!! Nice to see you again! Hope you had a nice week!! Typos I found for chapter 4:
- Page starts with "You squint at what you have done." When choosing why you want to paint your nails, there's a bunch of options that seem incomplete. "You like to stay up to date with the trends. You are decently popular despite your", "You have little desire to be". There's a period missing at the end of the "You don't want to stand out" option as well.
- Same page, passage starts with "The girls at school have pristine nails. " In the last line, it's your instead of you're.
- Page starts with "You enter the Black Swan." I think it's were instead of are in the "You sometimes wish there are windows in the Black Swan" but I'm not sure tbh. English is not my first language so I struggle a bit with grammar sometimes D:
OMG SANS' DATE GOT ME GIGGLING AND STUFF LIKE YOU HAVE NO IDEA. Wonderful chapter, as always! Also, good luck with making your game!! <3
An excellent update! I'm loving the clues system and sniffing them down. I'm also VERY intrigued by the new oddities introduced with Asriel, and eager to see what they're building up to. Papyrus, meanwhile, continues to be a steadfast sweetheart... which only has me wondering when we'll see him being dangerous. Great work!
I've been rounding up issues I note through the chapters to try and help keep everything to one fell swoop of error sweeping; I'll be posting it in a follow up comment.
Continuity: CHP2 - On any route but the Sans route, both Sans and Ralsei end up including the note about monsters being large, leading to repetition.
CHP3 - At the beginning of the chapter, it says you grab your blankets and pillow (singular) off the bed, but when the shootout starts the pillow is on the bed. (This is extremely nitpicky, but I figure I'd put it down anyway!)
- In Papyrus' scene in Sans' route, he's described as 'familiar', but the MC didn't see Papyrus before this because they went out the back while trying to avoid Sans.
CHP4 - The music queue from the night jog scene doesn't transition properly in Papyrus' and Wingding's routes.
Typos & writing suggestions: CHP1 "Ebott City is the second largest cities in the country." "It's not ever quiet at night" -> never "You're on the seventh floor and there is no fire escapeon this side of the building" "You never touched the basket, yet somehow your in first spring here" "On the wind you catch the sublte floral scent of your roses" "The skyscrapers block [...] you even lose site of Mt. Ebott in the back." -> sight "They reach high in the sky with their acromatic colors" -> achromatic "They run the Fell Kingdom and are the largest supplies of magic crystals in all of Delta." -> supplier "They have a kind of uniform-all members where a black suit hat" -> wear "Each window a different a light" -> remove an a
CHP2 "She is a tall woman who laughs with her whole body and has many wrinkles on her tauny skin" -> tawny
"He's the bartender for the dayshift, whereas your the bartender for the evening shift." "Don't don't your heart, Frisk." "As a monster, you know he could be dangers, but when you look at him you feel no threat."
CHP3 "What're workin' on?" he asks. -> forgot 'you' "You crack a small smile You'd love to." -> missing period
"You ask him if he'd be okay to wait for you to get changed—you camere here to run."
"The waiters wear a long-sleeved white shirt dress" -> dress shirt "A shiver a fear slides down your spine." "Someone in the biulding stole it, or... destroyed it?" "What's it matter?" he asks with a frown when he notices your expression. -> should be "what's the matter"
; "what's it matter" would be more appropriate if he already knew what the problem was and was dismissing it
CHP4 "Mister Scott clearly needed someome to talk to"
"You pass many people in street" -> forgot 'the' "You skimmy through it" "You turn to the voice [...] crimson eyelights in a black sockets." -> remove the a "Along with fervor desire." -> should be fervent
I love you for this. I'll keep making fixes when I get back from work, but I really really want to convey how grateful I am that you took the time out of your day to help me with this. Truly and sincerely thank you!
Thank you! I'm happy you like the Clue system, it's been fun to figure out how to get it to work and coming up with things to sprinkle in. I'm still on the fence if I want to keep doing the "Your clues have been updated" every time a clue is added, or if I should remove it and leave it up to the player.
I have every intentions of adding an interlude from the monsters' perspective, so perhaps you'll get to see Papyrus getting dangerous there!
In my opinion, if you're gonna have a clues page, I think the clue notif should stay! It prompts the player to check out their clues regularly and see what's changed; without the notif, it'd be easy to completely overlook the clues page. Players can still ignore it regardless, but having the notif helps lead the eye in a sense, especially for those actively interested in deeper knowledge of the game's world.
If you want to strike a balance between clarity and mystery, you could change the notif text into something more subtle. Something like 'You should remember that.' would toe that line. (That's just an example, of course; if you do change it up, feel free to make it something else and keep it a secret ;) )
Actually, checking out the clues system brought me to another error:
CHP3 - "You have some time before work.": If you check the clues page after picking one of the paths, returning to the game causes it to act as if you'd picked two paths and forces you to head to work.
The new chapter and improvements you‘ve done are fucking awesome!Did you compose the music?It is great af XD!The scenes with Lawrence were so cute and- and th-the descriptions were sooooo great!I was so scared when the music turned so horrific while watching the kidnapping of the poor men across our apartment and while running for dear life in the middle of the night!It gave me goose bumps!We need more of this!!!!!XD
THank you!! Nope, the music is credited in the disclaimer at the start of the game. All of it is royalty free music that I found.
I love writing the scenes with Lawrence! I especially had fun in the last chapter since I got to write different scenes for each of the character's gender.
Hahaha I'm both sorry and happy that the music scared you.
Yaayy another update from my fav developer! I just loved Ch4 with it's cute elements like the fun yet passionate date with Sans and the bonding time we got with "Ralsei", everything just fit perfectly together.Especially when you consider the short time it took you to create this. I'm already extremely excited for the next Chapter that's coming up, good luck and don't overwork yourself!
hehe thank you! Writing the different tones between Sans & "Ralsei" gave me whiplash in the first drafts.
Each update I try to also add a little more description / fluidity to the previous chapters. I know I get the chapters out quick, so I want to make sure by the time the full game is finished all the chapters feel padded and fleshed out.
I was wondering if you could use a more gender neutral term for the non-binary player, when it says “people find you handsome” you could instead make it “people find you attractive” or something along those lines?
Around the time it was pretty common for men and women alike to be called handsome, so it could definitely work as a neutral ground. It was also used for women that fit the “Fem-fatal” statement.
Though I see where you’re coming from with attractive being a more generalized term!
Hi ! Loving this game so far, but I found a bug. In chapter two, if mc is a woman, we can't continue the game if we choose the option "nice clothes"(or smth like that). Says gender's not defined. Tried with another option and it worked :).
I have played your "If - Underfell" Game and I absolutely loved it. I checked your page and I'm glad I did, Because I found this Awesome game. I love the fact (even tho currently limited) That you can choose anyone to date or be friends with. I also love the fact that you, the player, can customize the mc, In general I love playing this game, I can tell that I will come back to this game a lot when I'm Bored. I'm also very interested to see how you make these games and I'm interested to see if you will make more of these games, Because I absolutely love them. Keep up the good work <3.
back for more of your absolutely wonderful work. and, yet again, i am after the weird skeleton man, surprise surprise. i love the story so far, always been a fan of mafia centered stories and shows. i'm so excited to see what you continue to do with this <3 keep yourself well and thank you for what you do !!
After finishing Underfell I decided to try this game out and I'm very pleased with what I've seen so far. Papyrus has always been my favorite ever since Undertale so I'm very happy that I get to romance Papyrus in these games and I just love how the frisk is customizable and not just set for us. It's a very nice touch that I just adore. That's enough of my ranting(?) please take care of yourself and have a good day! :D
(papyrus is so cute in this btw, and I absolutely adore it!)
Yay on finishing Underfell!! Thank you so much for giving this game a shot!
I could never exclude the great Papyrus, he's too wonderful to write.
Everyone deserves a chance to put themselves in a fandom they love. I'll do my best to keep adding more and more options as my programming gets better so no one feels excluded. :)
(I think you'll enjoy his route, I have a lot of cute moments planned.)
I hope you're doing well today! Thank you so much for the wonderful update! The typos I found for chapter 3 so far:
- Page starts with "Lawrence makes a tired noise when he comes home." Later on, there's a period missing in the "You giggle" line. I found the same mistake a bit later on, in the "You giggle You'd love to. Would he have time for it?" line.
- Page starts with "You can't do anything. Stop. Walk away." after you choose to help the old man. In the line "The protection fee is useless, desparate instead of desperate.
- Not sure if it's a typo or intentional, but writing it down here just in case. "The streets are empty outside your apartment." page, when meeting Wingding. When the mc looks up at him, the option you chose to represent when you're feeling danger repeats twice. In my case, it looks like "You feel the hairs on the back of your neck raise.
You slowly raise your gaze up.
You feel the hairs on the back of your neck raise.".
That would be all! Again, thank you so much for the update! <3
Hi!! Doing well so far. Hope your week has been treating you kindly!
-Found & fixed - will be included in the next update.
- Same as above
- Yeah, it seemed like a good idea when writing, but after having read it a few more times it feels unnecessarily repetitive. Second line will be deleted.
I so very very appreciate you doing this! Much love! 🥰❤️
GREAT GAME!!!Got a question tho;will the player (in a later chapter) be able to marry into the Dreemurr or Skelle-family to find out more about Lawrence‘s disappearence (and romance ofc)?I think that would be so cool :)
Re marriage - perhaps after the main story? I have an idea for a little "sequel" and I'm not opposed to mixing in marriage or something equivalent to that.
As long as the player stays alive and finds all the correct clues... yes. You will be able to figure out what happened to Lawrence.
hey! just saw this game after i finished your underfell game and i am so excited to play this! quick question though, how many chapters do you plan on there being? :)
:D Thank you for playing Underfell and I hope you enjoy this one!
Tentatively 10-13? I have the outline of the story but I haven't broken them down to chapters, I mostly free-form write until I reach a good stopping point.
Hey, I also wanted to see a happy ending for Sooner or Later You'll Be Mine, Actually... I decided to start this game as soon as I knew about it because I was watching that comic too!
(I hope there aren't any mistakes in my wrtitting, now, I must speak in spanish since this text took a long time to be writed...)
Amo como se desarrolla la trama, el hecho de tener pistas es genial! Estaba profundamente triste estos últimos días, pero ver un capitulo nuevo me da un cosquilleo de felicidad.... Gracias por trabajar tan duro, normalmente otros juegos de este tipo les toma mas de una semana actualizarse, por eso siempre te daré las gracias! <3
(Tuve un problema pues, el archivo de guardado que había descargado no funcionaba, así que tuve que volver a jugar todo desde el principio, pero aparte de eso todo se ve bien nwn)
Lo estás haciendo muy bien, feliz de leer lo que escribas en inglés o español.
Lamento mucho escuchar que te has sentido triste. Espero que tu vida esté mejorando y puedas descansar mucho este fin de semana.
Me alegra que te guste la adición de CLUES, me divertí mucho añadiéndola.
Si guarda en DISK, puede guardar su juego en su computadora y luego volver a cargar el guardado en el juego cada vez que haya una actualización.
El uso del botón normal "SAVE" guarda el juego en su navegador y muchos navegadores borran sus cachés después de un cierto período de tiempo; esto eliminará sus archivos guardados.
Congratulations!! If you're using Twine Sugarcube the Save/Loads are automatically included in the ui when you publish so you don't need to add them unless you are creating a ui from scratch. :)
BTW you wrote ‚pair of pair of white gloves‘ in addition to the dress;that the player sits on their coach instead of couch while listening to the radio(just wanted to point that out😅)
Darkpetal16?Are you ok with fanart of this game being posted here?I don’t wanna offend you by doing that w/o permission(also no,i don’t have Tumblr or anything and it won‘t let me in anyways)
I am so in love with this piece as well as UF! But somethings stopped me from continuing? Dunno it might be just me but i tried restarting the game but i can't seem to go any further from this part (I am also a fresh acc, and im so in love with this story that i had to make an acc just to seek help, i so hope i ain't bothering ;v;) Thank you!
This ability isn't something you advertise.
And the last time this ability was triggered it led to your brother's disappearance.
There is something more about your dream. It's prophetic.
No worries - when choosing how to address your father are you picking the “papa” title? I was able to replicate the issue when choosing that route but it works okay on the other titles.
I’ll be taking a look at the coding when I get home. In the mean time, would you try using the “Pa” title and let me know if you don’t see the option to move on from there.
Great chapter! I saw some code mistakes tho, some $ signs are across the code, and eye color in the sans route is coded, but it's not working so its "$eyecolor$" or something. Anyways, very good chapter!
OK SO I PLAYED THROUGH THIS ONE (i was busy and havent been able to, i also finished all the routes of ur UF one and i loved them sm) and i am VERY excited for this, from what i've seen its a lot more customizable and seems like it'll be the type of game to make me twirl my hair and kick my legs n giggle n shit /j but it seems super good so far i love it so keep up the good work! (also take all the breaks u need, dont overwork urself)
CHAPTER 2 WAS AWESOME!!! went for the sans route but there was an error when showing the span class for the yellow heart everytime it's called. There are also errors when calling variables like $Miss. Overall, I enjoyed it a lot!!! Looking forward to the next update :D
Found and fixed! I appreciate you playing & commenting - very happy to find any mistakes and get them rectified. Thank you for taking a screenshot too, made it very easy to find the issue and fix it.
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Hihi!! Nice to see you again! Hope you had a nice week!!
Typos I found for chapter 4:
- Page starts with "You squint at what you have done." When choosing why you want to paint your nails, there's a bunch of options that seem incomplete. "You like to stay up to date with the trends. You are decently popular despite your", "You have little desire to be". There's a period missing at the end of the "You don't want to stand out" option as well.
- Same page, passage starts with "The girls at school have pristine nails. " In the last line, it's your instead of you're.
- Page starts with "You enter the Black Swan." I think it's were instead of are in the "You sometimes wish there are windows in the Black Swan" but I'm not sure tbh. English is not my first language so I struggle a bit with grammar sometimes D:
OMG SANS' DATE GOT ME GIGGLING AND STUFF LIKE YOU HAVE NO IDEA. Wonderful chapter, as always! Also, good luck with making your game!! <3
- This one I will have to look into a bit more, as it works on my end so I'm wondering if it's a technical issue with exporting.
- you're --> your
- reworded the entire sentence to You sometimes wish Black Swan had windows
>:D Yes! All the giggles for the Sansy date! Thank you so much for your help again!!
i love papyrus he is so cute and i love this game too ❤️
You do too?I‘m glad to find another person with the same passion for the tall skelleton XD❤️
he is such a cute gentleman 😊
should i draw a human that anybody can change to their liking/Frisk with Papy?I am thinking about it ngl
It should say "Uh, actually I'm painting a picture of me and my brother"
That's a funny mistake. It's fixed now and will be reflected in the next update. Thank you for your help!
An excellent update! I'm loving the clues system and sniffing them down. I'm also VERY intrigued by the new oddities introduced with Asriel, and eager to see what they're building up to. Papyrus, meanwhile, continues to be a steadfast sweetheart... which only has me wondering when we'll see him being dangerous. Great work!
I've been rounding up issues I note through the chapters to try and help keep everything to one fell swoop of error sweeping; I'll be posting it in a follow up comment.
Continuity:
CHP2
- On any route but the Sans route, both Sans and Ralsei end up including the note about monsters being large, leading to repetition.
CHP3
- At the beginning of the chapter, it says you grab your blankets and pillow (singular) off the bed, but when the shootout starts the pillow is on the bed. (This is extremely nitpicky, but I figure I'd put it down anyway!)
- In Papyrus' scene in Sans' route, he's described as 'familiar', but the MC didn't see Papyrus before this because they went out the back while trying to avoid Sans.
CHP4
- The music queue from the night jog scene doesn't transition properly in Papyrus' and Wingding's routes.
Typos & writing suggestions:
CHP1
"Ebott City is the second largest cities in the country."
"It's not ever quiet at night" -> never
"You're on the seventh floor and there is no fire escapeon this side of the building"
"You never touched the basket, yet somehow your in first spring here"
"On the wind you catch the sublte floral scent of your roses"
"The skyscrapers block [...] you even lose site of Mt. Ebott in the back." -> sight
"They reach high in the sky with their acromatic colors" -> achromatic
"They run the Fell Kingdom and are the largest supplies of magic crystals in all of Delta." -> supplier
"They have a kind of uniform-all members where a black suit hat" -> wear
"Each window a different a light" -> remove an a
CHP2
"She is a tall woman who laughs with her whole body and has many wrinkles on her tauny skin" -> tawny
"He's the bartender for the dayshift, whereas your the bartender for the evening shift."
"Don't don't your heart, Frisk."
"As a monster, you know he could be dangers, but when you look at him you feel no threat."
CHP3
"What're workin' on?" he asks. -> forgot 'you'
"You crack a small smile You'd love to." -> missing period
"You ask him if he'd be okay to wait for you to get changed—you camere here to run."
"The waiters wear a long-sleeved white shirt dress" -> dress shirt
"A shiver a fear slides down your spine."
"Someone in the biulding stole it, or... destroyed it?"
"What's it matter?" he asks with a frown when he notices your expression. -> should be "what's the matter" ; "what's it matter" would be more appropriate if he already knew what the problem was and was dismissing it
CHP4
"Mister Scott clearly needed someome to talk to"
"You pass many people in street" -> forgot 'the'
"You skimmy through it"
"You turn to the voice [...] crimson eyelights in a black sockets." -> remove the a
"Along with fervor desire." -> should be fervent
Continuity
CHP2
-Amended repetition.
CHP3
-Amended to "you grab your blankets and one of your pillows off the bed" so it makes sense to find one pillow still on the bed.
-OOO Really good catch. I've added a separation in this chapter now depending on if the player was on Sans route.
CHP4
-Added in the loop music to the passages. Will do a couple more tests to make sure it works.
Typos & writing suggestions:
CHP1
-cities --> city
-not ever --> never
-escapeon --> escape on
-your in --> in your
- sublte --> subtle
- site --> sight
- acromatic --> achromatic
- supplies --> suppliers
- where --> wear
- removed extra a
I love you for this. I'll keep making fixes when I get back from work, but I really really want to convey how grateful I am that you took the time out of your day to help me with this. Truly and sincerely thank you!
Typos & writing suggestions:
CHP2
tauny --> tawny
your --> you're
dayshift --> day shift
don't --> doubt
dangers --> dangerous
CHP3
added ya
added period
camere --> came
a --> of
-biulding --> building
it --> the
CH4
someome --> someone
added the
skimmy --> shimmy
removed a
fervor --> fervent
OOoo Thank you thank you thank you! This has been very very helpful.
Thank you! I'm happy you like the Clue system, it's been fun to figure out how to get it to work and coming up with things to sprinkle in. I'm still on the fence if I want to keep doing the "Your clues have been updated" every time a clue is added, or if I should remove it and leave it up to the player.
I have every intentions of adding an interlude from the monsters' perspective, so perhaps you'll get to see Papyrus getting dangerous there!
Thank you thank you! I'll take a looksie now.
In my opinion, if you're gonna have a clues page, I think the clue notif should stay! It prompts the player to check out their clues regularly and see what's changed; without the notif, it'd be easy to completely overlook the clues page. Players can still ignore it regardless, but having the notif helps lead the eye in a sense, especially for those actively interested in deeper knowledge of the game's world.
If you want to strike a balance between clarity and mystery, you could change the notif text into something more subtle. Something like 'You should remember that.' would toe that line. (That's just an example, of course; if you do change it up, feel free to make it something else and keep it a secret ;) )
Actually, checking out the clues system brought me to another error:
CHP3
- "You have some time before work.": If you check the clues page after picking one of the paths, returning to the game causes it to act as if you'd picked two paths and forces you to head to work.
The new chapter and improvements you‘ve done are fucking awesome!Did you compose the music?It is great af XD!The scenes with Lawrence were so cute and- and th-the descriptions were sooooo great!I was so scared when the music turned so horrific while watching the kidnapping of the poor men across our apartment and while running for dear life in the middle of the night!It gave me goose bumps!We need more of this!!!!!XD
THank you!! Nope, the music is credited in the disclaimer at the start of the game. All of it is royalty free music that I found.
I love writing the scenes with Lawrence! I especially had fun in the last chapter since I got to write different scenes for each of the character's gender.
Hahaha I'm both sorry and happy that the music scared you.
Yaayy another update from my fav developer! I just loved Ch4 with it's cute elements like the fun yet passionate date with Sans and the bonding time we got with "Ralsei", everything just fit perfectly together.Especially when you consider the short time it took you to create this. I'm already extremely excited for the next Chapter that's coming up, good luck and don't overwork yourself!
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hehe thank you! Writing the different tones between Sans & "Ralsei" gave me whiplash in the first drafts.
Each update I try to also add a little more description / fluidity to the previous chapters. I know I get the chapters out quick, so I want to make sure by the time the full game is finished all the chapters feel padded and fleshed out.
Thank you for your comment & for playing my game!
I was wondering if you could use a more gender neutral term for the non-binary player, when it says “people find you handsome” you could instead make it “people find you attractive” or something along those lines?
Hello!
I can definitely look into that for future conversations. :)
Thank you :]
Around the time it was pretty common for men and women alike to be called handsome, so it could definitely work as a neutral ground. It was also used for women that fit the “Fem-fatal” statement. Though I see where you’re coming from with attractive being a more generalized term!
the first game was amazing!! i have high hopes for this one!
Thank you so much! I'll do my best :D
the first time you mention the Black Swan you accidentally put the Black Swam
Oh, also what program do you use to make your games?
asked that earlier already.They/He/she use(s) Twine :)
Thank you!!!!
You‘re welcome 😊
Also there’s another typo on Asriels route where he says Gerat instead of great.
Oo, got that one fixed now. It will reflect in the ch5 update. Thank you very much for letting me know.
At the beginning of Papyrus’ route, the word orange is spelled range.
Oh thank you very much for letting me know! I've fixed this now so it will reflect in the ch5 update.
Thank you! I found & fixed that. And yes I use Twine, SugarCube2. :)
Hi ! Loving this game so far, but I found a bug. In chapter two, if mc is a woman, we can't continue the game if we choose the option "nice clothes"(or smth like that). Says gender's not defined. Tried with another option and it worked :).
Hi! Thank you so much for playing & reporting the bug. I've fixed it now so it will work okay in the chapter 5 update.
I have played your "If - Underfell" Game and I absolutely loved it. I checked your page and I'm glad I did, Because I found this Awesome game. I love the fact (even tho currently limited) That you can choose anyone to date or be friends with. I also love the fact that you, the player, can customize the mc, In general I love playing this game, I can tell that I will come back to this game a lot when I'm Bored. I'm also very interested to see how you make these games and I'm interested to see if you will make more of these games, Because I absolutely love them. Keep up the good work <3.
Thank you so much for checking this game out! I'm so grateful you like my games. I hope you enjoy the future updates. :)
When will the next update come out?(i love this so much)
Planning it for next weekend. If I finish sooner then before then. :)
I am waiting as patiently as i can but just the thougt of reading the new chapter makes me as excited as a child on a friday before summer break
back for more of your absolutely wonderful work. and, yet again, i am after the weird skeleton man, surprise surprise. i love the story so far, always been a fan of mafia centered stories and shows. i'm so excited to see what you continue to do with this <3 keep yourself well and thank you for what you do !!
Thank you so much for comin' back! :D
They are very good skelly men. They deserve all the love!
I hope you like what I have in store, I adore this 'verse and I've had a lot of fun planning what's ahead.
Thank you! Please do take care of yourself too! 😊
After finishing Underfell I decided to try this game out and I'm very pleased with what I've seen so far. Papyrus has always been my favorite ever since Undertale so I'm very happy that I get to romance Papyrus in these games and I just love how the frisk is customizable and not just set for us. It's a very nice touch that I just adore. That's enough of my ranting(?) please take care of yourself and have a good day! :D
(papyrus is so cute in this btw, and I absolutely adore it!)
Yay on finishing Underfell!! Thank you so much for giving this game a shot!
I could never exclude the great Papyrus, he's too wonderful to write.
Everyone deserves a chance to put themselves in a fandom they love. I'll do my best to keep adding more and more options as my programming gets better so no one feels excluded. :)
(I think you'll enjoy his route, I have a lot of cute moments planned.)
╰(✿´⌣`✿)╯♡ Take care of yourself!
Papy is such a gentleman i‘m blushing (///0-0///)
Papy is suave in every fell'verse and he is a gentleman in every verse period. I refuse to believe otherwise!
I hope you're doing well today! Thank you so much for the wonderful update! The typos I found for chapter 3 so far:
- Page starts with "Lawrence makes a tired noise when he comes home." Later on, there's a period missing in the "You giggle" line. I found the same mistake a bit later on, in the "You giggle You'd love to. Would he have time for it?" line.
- Page starts with "You can't do anything. Stop. Walk away." after you choose to help the old man. In the line "The protection fee is useless, desparate instead of desperate.
- Not sure if it's a typo or intentional, but writing it down here just in case. "The streets are empty outside your apartment." page, when meeting Wingding. When the mc looks up at him, the option you chose to represent when you're feeling danger repeats twice. In my case, it looks like
"You feel the hairs on the back of your neck raise.
You slowly raise your gaze up.
You feel the hairs on the back of your neck raise.".
That would be all! Again, thank you so much for the update! <3
Hi!! Doing well so far. Hope your week has been treating you kindly!
-Found & fixed - will be included in the next update.
- Same as above
- Yeah, it seemed like a good idea when writing, but after having read it a few more times it feels unnecessarily repetitive. Second line will be deleted.
I so very very appreciate you doing this! Much love! 🥰❤️
btw i did some calculations on the characters OG heights:
Papyrus: 44 pixels≈7’4
Sans:30 pixels≈5‘0
Asriel:28 pixels≈4‘8(his adult version doesn‘t have an overworld-sprite so i‘m guessing 6‘8)
Gaster:48 pixels≈7‘6
(Sans is literally a dwarf amongst monsters XD)
That's interesting! I'm not sure what the exact heights are for this verse - but I am going off of Sooner or Later You're Going to Be Mine which is also drawn by Melikas (https://tapas.io/series/Sooner-or-Later-Youre-Gonna-be-Mine/info).
'Course Sans is still short as heck compared to his brothers haha.
GREAT GAME!!!Got a question tho;will the player (in a later chapter) be able to marry into the Dreemurr or Skelle-family to find out more about Lawrence‘s disappearence (and romance ofc)?I think that would be so cool :)
Thank you!!
Re marriage - perhaps after the main story? I have an idea for a little "sequel" and I'm not opposed to mixing in marriage or something equivalent to that.
As long as the player stays alive and finds all the correct clues... yes. You will be able to figure out what happened to Lawrence.
That sounds sooo cool XD
Also we did tell Daisy that she could do our bouquet that’s why i asked :)
I can't wait for there to be a full game of this, I literally binged playing through this game and was sad to be left on a cliffhanger.
Me too, would love to finish this hahaha. Thank you for binging! Promise not to leave the next one on a dramatic cliff hanger. :)
lol it left me wanting more to the point i turned back to fanfiction of it 🤣
Heck yeah! Also the comic artist for Sooner or Later started updating again if you want to binge through that! https://tapas.io/series/Sooner-or-Later-Youre-Gonna-be-Mine/info
hey! just saw this game after i finished your underfell game and i am so excited to play this! quick question though, how many chapters do you plan on there being? :)
:D Thank you for playing Underfell and I hope you enjoy this one!
Tentatively 10-13? I have the outline of the story but I haven't broken them down to chapters, I mostly free-form write until I reach a good stopping point.
Hey, I also wanted to see a happy ending for Sooner or Later You'll Be Mine, Actually... I decided to start this game as soon as I knew about it because I was watching that comic too!
(I hope there aren't any mistakes in my wrtitting, now, I must speak in spanish since this text took a long time to be writed...)
Amo como se desarrolla la trama, el hecho de tener pistas es genial! Estaba profundamente triste estos últimos días, pero ver un capitulo nuevo me da un cosquilleo de felicidad.... Gracias por trabajar tan duro, normalmente otros juegos de este tipo les toma mas de una semana actualizarse, por eso siempre te daré las gracias! <3
(Tuve un problema pues, el archivo de guardado que había descargado no funcionaba, así que tuve que volver a jugar todo desde el principio, pero aparte de eso todo se ve bien nwn)
¡El cómic comenzó a actualizarse nuevamente!
Lo estás haciendo muy bien, feliz de leer lo que escribas en inglés o español.
Lamento mucho escuchar que te has sentido triste. Espero que tu vida esté mejorando y puedas descansar mucho este fin de semana.
Me alegra que te guste la adición de CLUES, me divertí mucho añadiéndola.
Si guarda en DISK, puede guardar su juego en su computadora y luego volver a cargar el guardado en el juego cada vez que haya una actualización.
El uso del botón normal "SAVE" guarda el juego en su navegador y muchos navegadores borran sus cachés después de un cierto período de tiempo; esto eliminará sus archivos guardados.
Hi, GREAT game!!!!! but I encounter a bug at:
This ability isn't something you advertise.
And the last time this ability was triggered it led to your brother's disappearance.
There is something more about your dream. It's prophetic.
It's a warning.
I can't continue (Gaster route)
Hi! This bug was found and will be fixed in the upcoming update tonight. Thank you kindly!
Okay cool, and thank you for taking the time to respond
Dude you inspired me to make my own text based games , but i have a problem i dont know how to add save and load options
do you know how to make them?
Congratulations!! If you're using Twine Sugarcube the Save/Loads are automatically included in the ui when you publish so you don't need to add them unless you are creating a ui from scratch. :)
Will there ever be an IF-DELTARUNE?
No clue, I need to finish what I started before taking on another project.
BTW you wrote ‚pair of pair of white gloves‘ in addition to the dress;that the player sits on their coach instead of couch while listening to the radio(just wanted to point that out😅)
Would you happen to remember the passage?
Uh…not really.BUT!I remember what options i chose to find‘em!(Papyrus route)
1.When choosing the dress i wanted to wear the gloves and looked through the options and i found this little typo
2.When choosing my hobby (listening to music,automatically going to the next page)in the first lil‘ block of text i found that typo
(Happens to me too sometimes >~<)
I found it! Thank you. :) It will be fixed in the upcoming update.
Darkpetal16?Are you ok with fanart of this game being posted here?I don’t wanna offend you by doing that w/o permission(also no,i don’t have Tumblr or anything and it won‘t let me in anyways)
Fanart is welcome as long as it’s not explicit. :) If you decide to a tumblr you can post it there too!
Don‘t worry,my drawings are family friendly :)
I am so in love with this piece as well as UF! But somethings stopped me from continuing? Dunno it might be just me but i tried restarting the game but i can't seem to go any further from this part (I am also a fresh acc, and im so in love with this story that i had to make an acc just to seek help, i so hope i ain't bothering ;v;) Thank you!
This ability isn't something you advertise.
And the last time this ability was triggered it led to your brother's disappearance.
There is something more about your dream. It's prophetic.
It's a warning.
Hi!! I’m so glad you like UF and are enjoying this game so far. Would you mind confirming the route you are on?
San's route (Sorry for not mentioning that earlier-) And i am just having trouble with this game, UF is workin perfectly!
No worries - when choosing how to address your father are you picking the “papa” title? I was able to replicate the issue when choosing that route but it works okay on the other titles.
I’ll be taking a look at the coding when I get home. In the mean time, would you try using the “Pa” title and let me know if you don’t see the option to move on from there.
I absolutely adore this you’re amazing at storytelling and the music just sets the mood
(✿˵•́◡•̀˵)৴♡* Thank you so much for playing and commenting on MF! I hope you like this game as well. Ch3 coming out either tomorrow or the day after.
so true ngl :)
Will there be a chara route?
Perhaps after the full game has been released. I don't think I could do six full routes right off the get-go.
I will wait then •u•
Am so exited for future updates :)
Thank you! Ch3 is done but it will take a few days to edit / bug test.
omg I love the sans route(≧▽≦)
His route is definitely fun to write! Also had a lot of fun writing Wingding's bad ending in the upcoming chapter. ;)
I love this so much ahhhhhhh
(✿˶˘◡˘)♡ Thank you thank youuu
Does sans route end at chap 2
Right now only chapter 2 is released. Chapter 3 has been finished but it will take me a few more days to edit / bug test. :)
OH I SEE.. CAN"T WAIT love ur work btw
I want moreeeeeeee
this is good
<3 thank you!!
I found this
:D found and fixed! Re-uploaded the game. Thank you for posting!!
sanssss routeeee is sooo scandalous
(☞ﾟヮﾟ)☞
yessssss
Great chapter! I saw some code mistakes tho, some $ signs are across the code, and eye color in the sans route is coded, but it's not working so its "$eyecolor$" or something. Anyways, very good chapter!
Thank you! I think I got all the coding mistakes with this new update but if you see more please let me know!
OK SO I PLAYED THROUGH THIS ONE (i was busy and havent been able to, i also finished all the routes of ur UF one and i loved them sm) and i am VERY excited for this, from what i've seen its a lot more customizable and seems like it'll be the type of game to make me twirl my hair and kick my legs n giggle n shit /j but it seems super good so far i love it so keep up the good work! (also take all the breaks u need, dont overwork urself)
:D! Yes! I wanted to add a lot more branches and options in this game right from the get-go.
I do hope that you'll have fun playing it and it can leave ya feeling warm and happy by the end!
CHAPTER 2 WAS AWESOME!!! went for the sans route but there was an error when showing the span class for the yellow heart everytime it's called. There are also errors when calling variables like $Miss. Overall, I enjoyed it a lot!!! Looking forward to the next update :D
YAY! Thank you!
Found and fixed! I appreciate you playing & commenting - very happy to find any mistakes and get them rectified. Thank you for taking a screenshot too, made it very easy to find the issue and fix it.
You're welcome!